So I am very close to obtaining a PhD in molecular biology and I don't think there is anything wrong in there regarding the description of our known biology per se, but I find the level of information given a bit confusing. Who is the intended audience? It's nowhere near technical enough for a biology paper but then also too technical to just be directed at the general public. It reads more like something a nondescript scientist would say in a video game, like if you were to find notes in an abandoned lab after some unknown catastrophe kind of thing.
I would say it's a rather nicely written piece of sci-fi literature